Mother's Day Poem and Bracelet - Help!

I need your help! Tomorrow, I will help the little ones at church make a gift for their moms. They will be making bracelets like this:

I have written a little saying, I won't call it a poem, to go with the bracelet. But it is rough and I would love your help to refine it. Give me your revisions or if you have a whole better version let me know. Here's what I have so far, so you know what I'm going for here. I want to convey love and acceptance, even to those families who don't have two parents, or are in other ways different.

Our family is like this bracelet,

Each person is a bead,

Unique and precious-

Tied together with love

and the eternal bonds of the gospel.

Happy Mother’s Day!

Of course I need this ASAP! :)

BTW - Don't punch my craft in the face. Punch this instead, I found it when I went through the basement looking for my bead stash!!

 

It makes me laugh, the glass is broken - ah, my broken heart! And the TP has begun to yellow so it looks like someone used it :) It is a perfect white elephant gift!

Comments

[Stephanie Kunzler]

1.

Would you like it better with the 2nd and 3rd lines reversed? That may not make it say what you want it to say.

Steph

[Sara]

2.

I like the line reversal idea. But I LOVE the TP heart craft! Oh man -- how do things catch on? I remember thinking those were the coolest. And now? Ya, not so much.

[jendoop]

3.

The idea of switching the lines is a good one. Writing is so interesting! Changing that line gives the phrasing a different meaning so I decided not to use it, because of the nature of so many of our families, but I like it the other way too. Thanks for your help!
Hope you had a great M-day!

[Pam]

4.

Too late to help with the poem but it is a cute craft! I hope it turned out to be a fun activity with the kids!